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Shackles

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Wed, 4 Apr 2007 at 03:57pm

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7-30-06 When you’re gone, I feel alone Forced to call this place a home It has to get worse before it gets better All my hope drains as my eyes become wetter Horrible people reside in this place Four-letter words from that hole in their face I can barely recall all those “happy old times” Their words overshadow those thoughts in my mind I pray for a savior who’s holding the key To someday unlock these shackles on me They say I’m a kid who just dreams of big things But someday they’ll see I can grow my own wings.
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2007-04-04
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kluny
2007-04-04

this is really cool. except, uh, 'All my hope drains as my eyes become wetter'. Might want to rethink that line. (constructive, I hope)

thanks, don't worry, it was constructive:D