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kitsune

Falling Apart

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Sun, 29 Jul 2007 at 05:01pm

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The world goes black My vision blurs I want to go back Inside, pain stirs. There is no sound I want to cry No one's around I wish I knew why. Inside I go cold My tears fall A picture I hold. I feel nothing at all. The picture is blank There are no smiles My heart sank Only darkness for miles. My heart is broken My world is no more Like a tapestry unwoven My entire being is sore. In my hand I can feel I look down to find a gun My hand slides over the cold steel Reasons to live, I had none. I point it to my head I begin to laugh mildly I decide I'm better off dead My heart beats wildly. I pulled the trigger I cried out in pain My eyes got bigger It began to rain. I fell through the darkness My soul did depart I felt only coldness My life had fallen apart.
One other likes this.
2007-07-29
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 1 plus votes, and 0 astars.
kitsune
2007-07-29

This is a piece I wrote a long time ago and the stanza right before the last one is kind of lame, but overall, I think it's okay...

bobman12
2007-07-29
That is so bad ass. I'm gonna go read all you're stuff now.
bobman12
2007-08-21
I can't believe this isen't read more often. Serously I think it's my favorite on here.
sold
2007-10-04
I thought it was going somewhere, but I didn't like how the last two stanzas ended up.