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neoeno

Haiku-esque

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Fri, 21 Jul 2006 at 01:40pm

Suburban Sunset

Blue, white cloud speckled Fiery orange sunlight Shadows slanting down
Rules
5-7-5 syllable scheme, no words in title allowed in poem.
One other likes this.
2006-07-21
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 1 plus votes, and 0 astars.
nikeshlong
2006-07-23
is dis like a challenge fing?
evilfuzzymonster
2006-08-07

I dig this poem. :) I like haikus.

The first line of the haiku is "questionmark bang hash." I've called exclamation points "bang" since I heard my dad talking about programming PERL when I was little.

It was originally "questionmark backslash," but I edited it when I put it on MySpace because the entries always delete non-URL backslashes for some reason.

evilfuzzymonster
2006-08-07

Oh, and I think of the overall syllables and meanings differently than you do. I like that. It gives people room to interpret it differently. Sweet.

To me, it's:

questionmark bang hash

ampersand asterisk slash

period tilde

(At least, it used to be tilde. I have to go look at it now and see if somewhere along the line, it got changed to a hyphen.)

evilfuzzymonster
2006-09-10

Hee hee. I just realized, that with the only the first line of this poem appearing in your entry, then with the first lines of the comments ... we have:

"Shadows slanting down

Is dis like a challenge fing?

I like this poem."

*snerk*.

evilfuzzymonster
2006-09-10

Whoa. Just now, when I had the page open, "shadows slanting down" was the only visible line.

Now the whole thing is there.

Weeeeird.