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Sat, 15 Jul 2006 at 10:45am

Coursework

I opened the garage door and it slid up with several large clunks, piercing the night's silence. The orange light from the street lamps breaking in, making the moist concrete floor glisten.

I put my hand in my pocket and stood up straight. The figure inside was staring at me with a glare that topped them all. He wore a battered leather jacket and tatty dark blue jeans.

"This is the end of the road, Coursework," I said menacingly as I stepped slowly towards him, my black shoes making a dull clink on the floor as I went. He stood up to face me.

"One of us is going to go tonight Black," he hissed, "and I'm putting my money on you, when Sir finds out what you're doing, you'll get it, mark my words you will."

I gripped the cold steel in my pocket and looked straight at him for a moment. "You really think so?" I replied as I raised the gun to point at him, "I've been waiting a damn long time for this."

I felt the recoil shudder in my shoulder. He stumbled back, clutching his chest. I shot again. His stomach. He was nearly over. Complete. I turned my back on him and left the garage, only pausing to shut the door behind me.

Authors Notes
I wrote this very short story while in the midst of a huge coursework period. A lot of non-UK people rarely know what coursework is, suffice to say it is a huge lump of work (some run up to 100+ pages) which you can procrastinate with. It is also important for your future. When you leave it, it gets extremely bad and stressful.

Five others like this.
2006-07-15
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 5 plus votes, and 0 astars.
2006-11-11

The second 'sentence' is in fact not a sentence at all, by the grammatical suppositions of the English language.

lastxcaress
2006-11-14
Ah, I know the pain of coursework terribly well. I do like this a lot.
ender
2006-12-30
i am American, so i am always rite! im sorry. . . but i do like this piece.
golden_orchids
2007-01-09

hahahahahahaaa Steve you are a fantastic writer! Like the complete opposite of me, short sentances and simple effective descriptions combined with a good measure of wit and awareness :P

Snazzy

dan
2007-03-01

I agree, great descriptions, short and effective. However, I do feel the dialogue isn't quite right for the set up of the piece. Maybe that's just me.

Otherwise, once again, the descriptions were good, and so was the setting.

megalomaniac
2007-03-19

I'm not a fan. Nothing relateable or out of the ordinary, and as Dan said, the dialogue is pretty weak.

macca
2008-03-30

Wheyyy English :)

I felt the burning need to say "wheyy" then.

Maybe that is just a Liverpool thing though.

+1 because I could have used this story to cruelly read aloud to my art coursework whilst tying it to a chair in the wendy house with leather belts and it would have cried for mercy.