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Imaginary Friends

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Sat, 29 Sep 2007 at 12:02pm

Checkmate

The library was dimly lit, smelled of mildew, and the carpet patterns could’ve driven anyone mad. I saw him sitting in a folding metal chair at one of the tables near a window. He looked old, wore a wrinkled plaid shirt, kakis, and brown loafers. His thick glasses made him look like a barn owl but his eyes, whenever he put his reading glasses away, always looked so tired like a comedian that’s run out of jokes.

I watched him while he sat by the window and pushed game pieces around on the tabletop until he looked in my direction. I walked over and sat across from him. I was seven.

“Whatcha doin’?” He looked down at me through his glasses, past his bent nose and said gruffly, “It’s called Chess.” I tilted my head. “How d’ya play?” I noticed his eyes when he removed his glasses and tucked them away in his shirt pocket; one was cloudy blue, the other was sharp brown.

We met everyday in the afternoon at that same table where he taught me how to play.

“It’s not a game to play,” he told me, glaring down at the pieces, “It’s strategy, it’s a puzzle, it’s the art of war. It’s reading your opponent’s moves like you would read a book.” The Rook was my favorite piece.

The Librarian came over one afternoon and asked why I always sat there.

I told her we were playing chess. Her brow furrowed, “Who?” I pointed at him, “Mr. Bill.” He smiled, showing his straight yellowing teeth, his glare softened.

The Librarian gave a knowing smile, “Oh, your imaginary friend?” I shook my head in protest, “No, Mr. Bill.” There was a pause, I frowned,"He's sitting right here. That's his coffee on the window sill." She gave a small awkward laugh, “But there’s no one there, sweetie.”

The next day he didn’t show up so I waited. The pieces were the way we had left them the day before, so I didn't touch them. We never finished our game.

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2007-09-29
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inthecafeteria
2007-09-30

Oh my, this is rather wonderful. I especially like narratives that don't directly delve into emotions, but rather depict them through simple descriptions.

This was beautifully written. As with all good pieces, this went in a different direction than I'd expected, but it strode along nicely, in a way that was neither abrupt or dragging. It was rather pleasant.

And I love the way it ended. The last line was written perfectly, and I wouldn't change a word.

plus one, and I've noticed you've made a series for this. Sounds promising. Here's looking forward to more.