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Tower

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Sun, 7 Jan 2007 at 08:58pm

The Tower

No one really questions what the tower's for. It's been there since anyone can remember. No one's ever been seen entering or leaving it. I don't even think there's a way in. Just featureless stone bricks stacked upon eachother, climbing into the invisible reaches of the sky. Vines grow all along it and the stones are bleached with age from the sun and rain. It doesn't even have a name.

But still no one questions it. No one discusses it. It's as if their minds don't even register its existence. Right in the middle of town, people just walk right by it, without even a glance in its direction. Almost like they don't know it's there, but they do. It's been there all this time.

I haven't really payed it any attention until today. All day it's been all I can think about. I've asked people about it but the moment I mention the tower they simply walk by me. I call out to them but they don't listen.

They ignore me. Like I'm not even here.

But I am here. I'm here and the tower's here and I'm going to find out what's going on. I approach the massive structure as people walk by me, only registering my presence enough to maneuver around me.

I look up at the tower and hold back a gasp as I fail to see the tip of it. There has to be something to it. It's so huge. Maybe there's something inside it or waiting at the top of it. There has to be.

I take a few steps near the cold stone and place a palm against it.

Seven others like this.
2007-01-07
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 6 plus votes, and 1 astars.
neoeno
2007-01-08
Mystery! +1 for intrigue
golden_orchids
2007-01-09
Woooo spooky, very nice peice of writing, not over complicated and nicely effective! I'm waiting for a follow up of some sort lol
dan
2007-03-01

I like this one - it be really good for the beginning of a longer short story, or even a novel. It has this "Handmaid's Tale" vibe around it: the future, things sort of being sunken in, yet still a rebelious tendency to the unknown and feeling of oddity to it.

themilkman
2007-03-26
make this a series, fo' serious.
themilkman
2007-04-06
A*d!

+1, for sure -- not just for mystery, but also for sheer quality of writing. I like the way it's in first-person, and even more, I like how your choice of words convey the agitation and confusion of the narrator.