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Fri, 28 Jul 2006 at 12:16am

The Flaming Midnight Light (A one moment's expansion)

Now give it rhyme and rhythm A duration of time Systematically with them Surprisingly Lithium I remember music, once upon a time It wasn't about the political message inside I think of that one Secret Girl She was the secret little center of my secret little world Yeah well now that it's gone I better fucking adapt If there's a place to go I've got to put a face on and act It's not about what, but who Fuck fuck fuck fuck fuck fuck Cover my ass, think quick too They do control me and you Is everything strange right here, right now Get used to it, or get kicked out Mowed down thrown down A mutilated body on the ground Yeah well now that it's gone I better fucking adapt If there's a place to go I've got to put a face on and act Ever considered this I'm a dumbass kid Your blown mind is kicked Over and over and over and over and over and Yeah well now that it's gone I better fucking adapt If there's a place to go I've got to put a face on and act I blame it on brain disease It's my cerebral dawn Give me my meds, please Anyway, I'm now at ease Will I ever get a break I think my life's at stake Falling up or falling out A thought to make my life an ache Am I going to live Or am I going to die Somewhere in between Is not where I can reside Is something just ending Or is something beginning I must make a decision There's no time for reconsidering Is it selling out If my soul is a whore I can be a martyr But life's such a bore Try to be epic, Make a biblical reference Brain calisthinetics I am dead
Three others like this.
2006-07-28
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 2 plus votes, and 0 astars.
nikeshlong
2006-07-28

awsome poem

spose u cant kill the anti christ, anyway in reality i doubt he is the antichrist, cus even the antichrist would be driven mad by that siong, hes a force far greater lol

2006-07-28

I like this poem. I don't exactly like that you have to feel what this poem expresses (that's if you are, and you are who I think you are).

I'd like to hear this poem as it was intended. The rhythm and rhyme is a little erratic, which is slightly confusing; I think those aspects do work though, I just can't make sense of them. I particularly like this:

Am I going to live

Or am I going to die

Somewhere in between

Is not where I can reside

'nthis:

Is it selling out

If my soul is a whore

I can be a martyr

But life's such a bore

Am I right in thinking the selling out being bowing to the persecuting party to make things easier?

neoeno
2006-07-28
that long unsigned note was mine
evilfuzzymonster
2006-08-08

I like it. When I read it, I interpret it like song lyrics or a slam poem. Do you think of it as just a written poem, or do you see it in a performance way like I do? I'm interested to know your intentions for your own work.

zigzagtuesday
2008-07-03

i really like this for whatever reason. i agree with evilfuzzymonster, i'd like to know what exactly it's supposed to be.it does remnd me a lot of spoken word/slam poetry stuff. perhaps that's why i like it.

aetherlightning
2008-09-13
another good one by sold... I really like your introspective, stream of consciousness stuff