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miladyalise

London Breakdown

2004
Fri, 21 Aug 2009 at 05:34pm

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London Bridge is falling down, Falling down, Falling down. London Bridge is falling down, My fair lady. Now the house is falling down, Crashing down, Losing ground, Now the house is losing ground, Ohh, poor baby. Build it up with wood and clay, Wood and clay, Wood and clay, Now break it down, if you may, Let it decay, Let it decay. Break it down, if you may, I will. Maybe.
radio___clash
2009-11-18

The "crashing down/losing ground... ohh, poor baby" has a nice rhythm to it, and the overall mood of the piece is fantastic.

The ending, I feel, is a little weaker, specifically the transition from "break it down, if you may," to "maybe" feels abrupt, and not in a deliberate way.

Overall, though, I enjoy it, and any criticism is just nitpicking on a great piece.

miladyalise
2009-11-21
Thanks. Yeah, I was told I should extend it, end it better and I'm working at that.