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Mon, 9 Feb 2009 at 01:26am

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they build highways, streets and cars where once stood nature, pure they post up signs on the shoulder of the road a thin sheet of metal, a glossy coat just to say "Don't Litter". don't pollute our air- with your marijuana smoke Don't dirty up our seas- buy a parking pass or you'll have to leave Don't corrupt young minds- profanity in public, son that's a hefty fine define litter, mr. congressmen. the destruction of scenic view? the tractor trailer hauling coal and gas? the emissions and the fumes? three story houses and 6 acre lawns just cuz some one had cash to spare? maybe keep out signs meant for the homeless, eating dumpster remnants of last nights feast over there? So now you're going to fine someone for a wrapper thrown to the ground i'm not saying i think that they're ok but is YOUR logic sound? the government supports gasoline, strip malls and miles of concrete they're not pushing alternative energy, solar power or better systems for this new age and they won't hesitate to strip down the trees to build a bank. so i have to question how much they really care if maybe it's more about power then keeping the air we breathe clear? meanwhile and just 15 a night in jail, 6 months probation for public property vandalization when authorities see a kid and a can of paint first response is just to hate maintenance was gonna paint that side off white and cream and this graffiti is gonna leave a stain mr. congressman, tell me, what about the tagging do you hate? do the messages offend? do they ring true? or is it just a clashing hue? personally i think a little color's just what we all need to see a different side of things and bring a much needed sense of community to a place so developed, there's nothing to see it's mass delusion of reality, that the way we're run is fair. that litter means a wrapper but they'll build malls anywhere. it's mass delusion of reality, that alcohol is legal but cancer patients suffer still because pot's considered lethal.
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bowers
2008-09-18
I completely agree, a great message and really well put across
burning_sands
2008-09-18

tis a great message but i feel like the form could use a little help ...either that or i need to go back and read it as prosetry instead of poetry...

kluny
2008-09-18

Hey, what's wrong with marijuana smoke? that stuff has vitamins and minerals in it. Tobacco smoke is the evil one.

kluny
2008-09-18
Sorry, mizundastood. Kudos! Style is a little forced but the message is all good.
-mc
2008-09-22
I really liked this
zigzagtuesday
2008-09-22

you're definitely right about the form. like i said, it's pretty rough. i just got the idea and started wrting/rhyming. when i get bored enough i'll probably fix it up so it flows a little better