America the Ugly
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Wrote this a long time ago... I have slightly changed my political views since then but doesn't make it any less true... It's also a little rough in flow, which I tried to fix as I typed it up so let me know what you think regarding the rhythm of the piece...
You can't bring yourself to think that it's true
That all your life you've been lied to
The government doesn't care about the good of the country
They're only care about the the power and money
The justifications lie in keeping people free
But they're really just oppressing you and me
Giving more authority to the army and police
If we want to get along then lets all arm for peace
We live in the land of freedom for sure
A land that is good and just and pure
A land where everyone is supposedly treated the same
Yet criminals go free because of their fame?
And those who are different should hang their head in shame
And when a woman gets raped why is she to blame?
She's marked evil if she kills the life she carried
And wait, why can't same sex couples get married?
People are people, no matter who they like or are\
Is it really truth if it comes from a media star?
Just because they're on TV means they can't be wrong?
They just wouldn't dare have an opinion that doesn't belong
This is because the media is controlled by the bigoted state
The true source of all the enmity and hate
Anything that is not mainstream, it must be oppressed
They only tell you what they want, it's censorship at its best
Meanwhile corporations strive to lower their prices
So their workers will have to make some sacrifices
The CEOs increase the size of their money stacks
While the blue collar man at the bottom gets the axe
Third-world factories take advantage of the needy
Just because some millionaire gets a little more greedy
And what the hell are the religions fighting for
They all believe in God, there's no reason for the war
The Mid-East knows nothing but strife and enmity
While the West is controlled by Christianity
What happened to "separation of church and state?"
It no longer exists and if things keep going at this rate
There won't be a "separation of church and hate"
And we'll be one step closer to an apocalyptic fate
Politicians argue over two sides of a double-headed coin
Meanwhile constantly kicking the public in the groin
Trading away tax breaks for monetary favors
Behind those public facades are cold-hearted slavers
They say that their policies are the only solution
And they order the deaths of those wanting revolution
While this country was based on freedom and democracy
Now it just stops anyone trying to be truly free
I'm tired of being some governmental tool
I know their truth isn't truth, I'm not a fucking fool
People screw everyone over just for a few more bucks
Well I don't like our capitalism and this democracy sucks
Souls destroyed and lives wasted, all for a few cents profit
And you'll get locked away for saying, "maybe we should stop it"
America sure is the "Land of the free and the home of the brave"
But to me it looks like the home of the mindless and enslaved
I'm not some animal with an ID number and a tag
I will NEVER pledge allegiance to their flag
I don't like living in this hate-filled selfish land
No time to acquiesce, it's time to make a fucking stand
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Haha. I swear to god I wrote something almost exactly like this a few years back.
Except I think I said fuck more.
In regards to the rhythm, it starts out fairly even, but I think it gets a little jagged as you go along, but you tighten it up again at the end. I'd look back over the middle, if you really want a smooth rhythm to it, but I think it works fine as-is.
Also, YES WE CAN BARACK OBAMA AMIRITE?
yeah, good job. ae. It's hard to write in iambic pentameter (or whatever this is, I think it's close) without sounding like a twat. So it's pretty good. One thing I would change are the italicized bits, which seem a bit random and don't really do anything.
yeah thats what i was going for... there need to be a few more in there, actually, they are supposed to represent things that aren't true...
This piece is really impressive. I don't think I could write a piece that wasn't a short story and make it this long.
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