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Teacups

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Sat, 17 Nov 2007 at 01:00pm

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(If you've ever read any of Gertrude Stein's poetry, that is what this is modled after. Focus on sounds, images rather than 'making sense' as this... isn't intended to make sense. :P)

The World is made

of tea, Rose.

Rows and Rows and Rows

of teacups. The sky is half and half

snow is lemon and cream

and, yes, the sea is made

of tea. Tea. Tea. Tea.

see me cross the sea

in a chipped tea cup.

The steam forms fog, it's hot.

Locks and locks of chocolate

Marvelous magician lockpick

chalk on the sidewalk reminds me of

you wanted to wear a dress

I laughed and laughed, stopped short

stopped. stop-ped.

Your teary eyes and mine. I think

I hate dresses.

A teacup is like a sinking ship

and we, the pirates,

boiling in the sea.

Four others like this.
2007-11-17
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 3 plus votes, and 1 astars.
2007-11-18

Yeah, I get it. I normally wail about grammar, but I fully see what you were going for here. Quite cool. -Kluny

neoeno
2007-12-08
Verryyy goooood.... Melikes the sounds.
bowers
2007-12-11
odd but I like it I feel llik i should read it to myself out loud but I wont becasue im in the IT room at college and everyone would think im a bit weird so maybe I'll do it later :) +1