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<inthecafeteria> cyanide: you will write about a girl who wishes she were a boy so that she could date this gay guy she secretly has a crush on.
Lauren sighed and pushed her pen through the middle hole of her notebook. She never understood why they put holes into the sides of spiral notebooks. They didn't fit easily into binders. She was frustrated, so such trivial matters were just a way of drowning out other, more important matters.
She sighed in frustration. The pen wasn't fitting, not piecing together properly. Just like it felt like her life wasn't piecing together properly. For the past three months or so, she had been completely infatuated with a boy in her Sociology class.
There were only two really large obstacles in her way to this boy's heart. One: Aaron Brennan had no idea that she even existed. This was the lesser of her two issues, introducing herself wouldn't be that difficult to introduce herself one day, or get his screen name from a mutual friend. However, the second issue was the more pressing one. Aaron was gay.
It didn't seem fair to Lauren. The only thing keeping her from having a chance with this funny, intelligent, witty, attractive boy was a fucking y-chromosome. She didn't want to be another girl with that gay best friend. She wanted to be his. Stupid gay boys.
Lauren sketched herself out on the back of her notebook. Then she edited her sketch. First she flattened the chest, and broadened her shoulders. She chewed on her pen's cap as she though about the rest of her edits. She would need to define the muscles more, and shorten the hair. The second one would be harder to do in pen, but probably the easiest change she could make in real life.
Lauren? A boy? Now that was a thought. But... if it meant being with Aaron? Could she pose as a boy to win over a boy?
She frowned and poked her pen tip at the sketch a few more times. That wouldn't be fair to him. Or to her. But life wasn't playing fair, so did she have to?
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Some minor spelling mistakes: 'obstacle', not 'obstical', a missing T at the end of thought somewhere... But I'm just nitpicking, it's all good! Will you be going further with this? That would be interesting...
"she knew, as all women know, that straight men are for sex, gay men are for love" = border-line offensive
Silly me, that's what I get for using Notepad to write this. And not checking the spelling before posting, of course.
ITC's prompt was ironic, because I fell in love with a gay man once!
It's not offensive, themilkman, it's the truth. Most of us are sex-driven animals. Then again, I know some gay men who are sex-driven animals as well. Maybe it's just the nature of males.
Nevertheless, I enjoyed this piece. It's like... I really like you but there's basically nothing I can do to make you like me. It's a feeling I'm sure a lot of us can relate to, or at least I can relate to.
A*
- Matt
You pulled it off nicely. I especially like the ending bit, about life not playing fair. It is an interesting take on how to adjust, by not playing fair. Or something.
You achieved everything outlined in the prompt and it was quite the enjoyable read. For that, I award you with a plus one
I really liked this, but I don't feel like putting down any constructive criticism...so...go cyanide!
+1!
Now... if only Lauren were covering the social construction of gender in her sociology class... she might feel a lot more hopeful.
+1