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We were so naïve

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Sun, 12 Aug 2007 at 04:41am

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We were so naïve to believe.

We thought it would last forever.

We enjoyed it from growing in to fading away, which was the best we could do.

And now youth is like nostalgic porn for us, but we have no lust, we are just waiting.

We're waiting to die, with flickering memories wondering at how we squandered that privelege before it was drawn from us.

It is dark and all we have is a will to survive.

Just an instinct.

And we're grasping for our soul.

Perhaps we never should have made a sound.

Nine others like this.
2007-08-12
The commendations this piece recieved in IF1 were: 0 minus votes, 7 plus votes, and 2 astars.
bowers
2007-08-12
I like the sense of blind hope in this piece. You put it across very well. +1
aetherlightning
2007-08-12
A*
kluny
2007-08-12
Beautiful.
sold
2007-08-12

Well, thanks guys, and you can interpret this piece however you wish - but there was no hope in my mind.

inthecafeteria
2007-08-13

I never saw hope. I just saw it as a long string of regrets, accented heavily by the last line.

I already plussed this piece, but I couldn't think of much to say at the time. It's very good. Kinda sad, like a lot of your pieces [but not all of them!].

So yeah, plus one

sold
2007-08-15
inthecafeteria is quite perceptive, even when it comes to my pieces.