Twist Double A
Sat, 2 Feb 2008 at 11:57am
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I fell.
From the Sky, from the stars,
from my god,
He left me here, like garbage,
he left me here to rot.
My body weakens, everyday.
I age.
He said he's testing me,
so I write his test, everyday,
On this earth,
long as I must live,
and I will rot.
To return to you,
I will die.
I was thrust,
from this earth, the plants,
from my goddess.
She left me here,
like a stone dropped in a lake.
She left me here to rot.
My body weakens, everyday.
I age.
She said she's watching me,
so I wait.
On this earth,
long as I must live,
and I will rot.
To return to you,
I will die.
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Lol. I actually haven't seen that yet, and yeah. I just wish the site would let me space in front of sentences. The second part is supposed to be on the other side of the page
Reminds me of Portishead lyrics... "Wandering Stars".
I likes it... it has a kinda dark abstracted feel to it... like there are things to be filled in by the mind of the reader.
Of course, I might just be missing something :P But that's how it appears to me.. and thus +1'd it will be.
Aesthetically speaking, this poem is (risking the voiding of my Team Y membership) rather pretty. In and of itself it is great, the duality and stark similarities between the two 'sides' of your poem make it more so.
Aesthetically speaking, this poem is (risking the voiding of my Team Y membership) rather pretty. In and of itself it is great, the duality and stark similarities between the two 'sides' of your poem make it more so.